So, once again, I haven't followed the directions. Perhaps I shouldn't be so hard on my kids when they don't follow my instructions. But I regress.
My poem isn't about a moment, but a series of moments that changed my life.....for the better.
In a truck the world she entered
Blackened eyes her father rendered
Always crying, crying, a whiner
Around their fingers somehow twined
The youngest child; pampered, endulged
In a truck the world she entered
Life around her mother centered
Marriage divided, sadness entered
A new union, ending in death
Wailing, wailing, lost and broken
In a truck the world she entered
The scent of her mom surrendered
Woman, wife, sister, and mother
Wouldn't trade her life for another
Family first, finally centered
In a truck the world she entered
Quatern: 16 line French form composed of four quatrains. It has a refrain that is in a different place in each quatrain. A quatern has eight syllables per line. It does not have to be iambic or follow a set rhyme.
72 comments:
I think it's beautiful!
I have to decide which one I'm going to do still!
i suspect this is a rather large piece of your soul you offered us today. i haven't known you for very long (don't you love that??? KNOWN??? i've never met you!), but i think i was right behind you as you made your way through all the WW posts (i don't know how you do it. i had to start picking and choosing once i hit #60), and i saw a couple of clues as to what this poem may mean.
you are a strong, funny, beautiful, brave lady, miss angie! thanks for taking a chance on us.
i LOVED it.
Good stuff. Is the poem about you? Were you born in a truck, or am I way off.
That was a great poem.
Though something about it made me tear up.
it doesn't matter that you did follow the prompt, that was beautiful. Great job!
That was great. I susspect it was a bit healing for you. I think that poetry is one of your many tallents. Keep it up.
Oh, this is so good. I will come back and read this often. In a truck the world she entered. Fantastic.
I thought it was beautiful!
Oh Angie.. you are such a wonderful writer. I think you pretty much summed it up there, what an evolution you've gone through and yet you've retained all those things that make you so very special.
I am so happy to have you for a friend! {hugs}
what do you mean poetry is not your thing?? That was great!! And meaningful and emotional! Poetry not your thing...crazy girl!
WOW!!! This is great!!! I wish I could be that creative.... I just end up going with the lists; my brain is to scattered to think write something this meaningful!!
Great job Angie! I don't think I could whip out a poem if my life depended on it. :)
Interesting. I'd like to try this, it's thoughtful and deep.
Wow that was great - we will have to see what I can come up with - not sure I can
:)
Holly
that was great and I LOVED the smarty pants part at the end telling us how you did it... I remenber learnignabout writing poetry in school and college, but it has gone all out the window since I had babies...
Oh Angie...that was beautiful. I could never in a million years write something like that...
You did an amazing job, and also taught me what a Quatern is. Thanks!!
Beautiful poem :) And you said poetry wasn't your thing!
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Wow - well done!
Poetry IS your thing. And essays. And tales, etc.
Such an incredible writer.
Em
Thank you for sharing such intimate details of your life with us. Rather than echo what others have said I will just say - you are a talented writer. Claim it.
ahhhhhh yes.
I RELATE.
beautifully written.
Beautiful!
I like it!
That was amazing! You have a life's worth of tales to tell, I hope you keep sharing.
Good job, Angie. Loved it!
I wouldn't even know where to begin!
wow, i am so impressed!! that was great!! you are truly talented!! hugs and prayers...
I thought this was a GREAT poem! Good job. :-)
i am tipping my coffee to you right now! wow! i feel like i might know you better now.
So amazingly good. I think the quarern is now my favorite form of poetry.
thank you for sharing that with us.
i loved it.
Angie, you did such a beautiful job with this. There is no way I could whip something like this up.
Thank you so much for sharing this poem. So well written - beautiful.
poignant :)
Really beautiful!!
Whatevs! Poetry is SO your thing. That was amazing!
♥ Whatever is RIGHT!!! That was really good!
That was great... I'm glad you didn't follow the rules..
I loved what Deb said in her comment, 2nd one down. I agree about the kind of lady you are and that this is a large piece of your soul indeed. I am honored you took a chance on me once too and shed a little more light on who you are or more so what made you who you are.
I love what a window this is into your heart. I think it is beautiful Angie.
great poem. i usually don't follow directions either...well, unless i made them! :-)
Beautiful - thanks for sharing!
For someone who isn't totally comfortable with poetry, you sure wrote a beautiful piece. Really Angie, its very good.
Hey that was AWESOME Angie! All I can write is bad Haiku!
Amazing...
You need to write a book. Of poetry. For real. Please.
That was absolutely beautiful. Really beautiful.
Beautifully done. Extra marks for following a form. I had never heard of a Quatern before.
For not being much of a poetry writer, you sure knocked this one out of the ballpark.
I think this was beautiful and shares so much in the short 16 lines!!
Touching! :)
That was beautiful. I really loved it!!!
That is the best "I don't write poetry" poem I have ever read. I agree...you are incredibly talented..keep writing!
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That was deep, sister! I had to read it a couple of times to let it sink in---just like with any really good poetry! Very nice.
Beautiful & Powerful!!!
Wow..that was amazing. I would say poetry might just be your thing. Beautifully written!
That is an awesome poem. I like that you even gave the grammar/mechanics breakdown within the poem, but the content is even better. When an author can draw empathy out of the audience with mere words, the connection has been made. I can almost picture you working to keep it together as you draw this out of yourself. WAS it that hard to write?
Brilliant! I imagine it was challenging sticking to the eight syllable per line part, and I love the type of poem you chose to write - the echoing line in your piece continues to speak as to where your life began.
Talented indeed.
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Wow, that was great... You are really good at poetry... I am not so great in that area... Haave a great weekend,
Leslee
Beautiful...
has this wonderful poem inspired you to write more?
Some of the best things come from not following the rules. Love your poem.
I enjoy reading all your writing. For you to say poetry isn't your thing is crazy. You scrolled out an amazing poem which was surely a window to your soul.
Beautiful beautiful poem.
Very nice!! A good writer is a good writer..in my opinion!
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And I was so proud of myself for figuring out the "style" before you named it.
Angie this is unbelievable. I love love love love love it! So powerful, I re read it like five times to take it in. Beautiful. I love it! Great work mama.
You lost me at Quatern, but I enjoyed reading your poem. Very moving.
Joy
Wow, a lot was said in 16 lines.
Thank you for sharing it!
Wow! Excellent!
Thanks for posting this to Best Posts of the Week!
Nice!! Not bad for a non-poetic kind of gal. I like it.
Wow, Angie. That was amazing! You are so very talented!
I am just getting to know all of you and this definitely helps. Beautiful work and from it i can tell I like you as a friend.
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